Final Draft Feedback

Here are some comments left from my audience after posting the final draft on my video on Facebook.

Schools are Prisons - Final Draft

By Melisha

Audience Feedback

To gain some feedback from my audience I created a survey on the website http://www.surveymonkey.com/. The survey included 7 questions to find out what they thought of the video.

Here are the questions I included in the survey:

1. Overall, how did you find the video

(For this question a comment box allowed my audience to explain in their own words how they found the video.)

2. Do you think the narrative fits the genre of the video?

(A very important 'yes or no' question as I wanted to make sure that my video matches the punk genre.)

3. What do you think is needed to improve the video?

(It is important that my audience enjoy my video so I wanted their suggestions on what would make the video better.)

4. How did you find the perfomance of the actors in the video?

(For this question I gave five choices to choose from ranging from 'Great' to 'Could be better'. )

5. What music channel can you see this video on?

(To make sure that my video is falling under the right genre I gave the audience 4 channels to pick from which were NME TV, Kerrang, Scuzz, MTV Rock. As it is a punk video I hoped for my audience to pick Kerrang or MTV Rock as the channel Scuzz is well known for metal and NME TV mainly consists of indie music.)

6. Would you watch this video again?

(With the choices 'yes' or 'no' I found it important to discover if my video was worth watching again as a successful music video would be.)

7. Please explain why you picked this answer

(If the audience picked no this would allow me to gather more suggestions for improvement.)


The results from my survey were overall positive with some suggestions to improve. Here are some responses to the first question.

100% answered yes to the second question which was positive for my feedback.

Here are some responses to the third question which I found most relevant to developing the final draft of the video.

98% of my audience chose Kerrang for the fifth question which told me that my video was falling under the right genre.

Digipak ideas

In order to portray the theme of entrapment and inform the audience of the genre I have come up with an idea for my digipak which includes a punk looking male teenager holding a mugshot sign if he's been nicked. He will be wearing uniform as a form of prison wear.

Another idea includes a punk looking male teenage school boy behind school gates holding onto the bars to make him appear as a prisoner. A distressed facial expression will add to the depressing atmosphere I intend on portraying.

I may edit these images to black and white and use a red font over it as these colours connote a punk genre.

These ideas not only show the idea of schools as prisons but reach towards the audience of punk rock with the mise en scene I intend to use.

Schools are Prisons - Rough Cut

By Melisha.

Here is the rough cut for my video which I edited in iMovie. I tried to match the clips to the timing of the beats of the song. Once I have feedback from my audience I will then be able to move on to the final draft.

Magazine Advert Analysis: Green Day 'American Idiot'

This advert features the album cover art revealing the bands name and album title. The colours on the ad such as red, black and white indicate a punk genre to the audience. The gory image shows a hand squeezing what appears to be a heart shaped grenade. This

image refers to a track on the album titled 'She's a Rebel' with the line 'She's holding my heart like a hand grenade'. As this is the bands seventh album it explains why they have not used an image of themselves. This is an emotional and symbolic image which indicates to the audience what their tracks may be about. The grenade may symbolise that the band themselves are going to 'blow up' through this album after a quiet period.

The black background makes the brighter colours and the image stand out. The colour red connotes different meanings such as passion, love and violence. The font is placed on the upper left hand side of the composition with each word seperated guiding our eye down the advert. The letters are in capitals highlighting the bands name.The white and red colours create a relationship between the text and image.

By displaying the bands name, album title and a symbolic image, the advert is simple but still as effective. By not showing so much information the band may want the audience to find out more by listening to the album, the clues are left on the advert to draw the audience in. These clues are necessary information, the image hints out the topic of the album.

Filming (lll)

Making sure the weather looked nice for these particular shots I went around the school with a camera to get a range of shots of CCTV camera's and school gates to portray entrapment. I made sure I got plenty of low angle shots of the gates as this will show how powerless the students are behind the gates. The shots of the birds behind the gates turned out very well and will signify freedom in my video. I also got several shots from a classroom window which had what seemed like bars positioned in front, I thought this would be another good shot to portray entrapment.